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Not to be a jerk, but you're probably going to need to re-write that paper. If your teacher doesn't ask you to and gives you an A or a B, then you're not getting an education.The main problem is the lack of a thesis and organization. Any paper or essay should have a point. Something you are arguing. You've got a bunch of points under the surface, but you don't actually come out and pick one. Or, if you want to have several points, you need some kind of umbrella thesis statement at the beginning that lays them all out.A secondary problem is you quote a person with one opinion, but don't quote any contrary opinions. SO, you also need to quote someone who disagrees with Adam Taylor. Then you need to evaluate and make a conclusion.For example, a thesis could be "Despite its current status as the least popular discipline of BMX bike riding, the BMX specialty known as flatland merits praise for three main reasons: the difficulty of flatland riding, the technological advancements found in flatland specific bikes, and the excitement of modern flatland competitions. Or, "This paper will evaluate three main arguments about why flatland is the least popular of the BMX disciplines and what can be done to increase its visibility and participation. The three assertions of flatland naysayers are (1) it is too difficult to be popular (2) flatland contest are not entertaining and (3) flatland bikes are too specialized for general riding."HAH, once again I'm not being a jerk. I had to write TONS of papers through high school, in college as an English/Philosophy/History major, and now in my profession. Writing is hard. The sign of a good writer is that they are willing to re-write. If you learn to write well in 9th grade you will be way ahead of people. A lot don't learn till college, if ever.
can you describe vision to the blindcan the deaf appreciate musicyou do not know anything about flatlandbut you wish to describe flatland to people who know nothing of ityou choose words to describe flatlandyou will be unsuccesfulyou deserve an F
Quote from: NAIRATATALF on May 19, 2009, 04:06:34 AMcan you describe vision to the blindcan the deaf appreciate musicyou do not know anything about flatlandbut you wish to describe flatland to people who know nothing of ityou choose words to describe flatlandyou will be unsuccesfulyou deserve an FSure, write a poem about the inexplicability of flatland. That's cool with me! "Words cannot describe" however is not poetry. It's a cop out. Poetry means putting the inexplicable into words. Try harder next time.As for the research paper advice, I was tellin a brutha how to make an A in a class. That's the sum of it.
Poetry W.B. Yeats and Oscar Wilde: That's limiting.
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First to the original postee. Sorry that your topic is being crashed. NIRATATALF is bent on bringing my name into his game... "tell me who your friends are and I'll tell you who you are." Go On...N